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Indie Skreet



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PostPosted: Fri Mar 03, 2017 12:41 pm    Post subject: BREATHLESS  Reply with quote



BREATHLESS

cinders bask in burning peace
beneath an orange sky
where souls are gently laid to sleep
and winds agree to die
and painted ladies flutter
while dotted beetles crawl
where swallows sweep and roses weep
as petals brown and fall

until the winter blows to white
the muted autumn ‘scapes
with whose passing it ignites
in swathes of fruitful shapes
when the mourning cloaks take to leaves
awash with morning dew
and the hawthorn trees, sway and breathe
to the cry of a cuckoo
shrouded by a sheet of green
with sweetly studded daisies
where the humble bumbles meet to eat
and a phantom bloodhound lazes

a way of life for breathless ones
in ashes pearled to grey
that wallow in a lively sun
shining upon the day
where nothing ever matters
and nettles never sting
amid the twigs and floral sprigs
which bud again each spring

Indie Skreet - 01/02/2017


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Indie Skreet



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PostPosted: Sat Mar 04, 2017 10:48 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

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Lainie Harm



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PostPosted: Thu Mar 09, 2017 3:19 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Loved the gentleness and the quiet serenity of it Indie
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PostPosted: Sun Mar 12, 2017 8:24 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

This flows beautifully with some super imagery and a gentleness to convey a peaceful and graceful passing
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Indie Skreet



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PostPosted: Sun Mar 12, 2017 8:49 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

many thanks, Bluenote, and hopefully it will be a while Smile
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PostPosted: Tue Jun 13, 2017 11:18 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hi
A beautiful poetic description.
The images used and layers of meaning make it a joy to read.
Bless you
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obadiah grey



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PostPosted: Tue Jun 13, 2017 5:17 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hiya, Indie. I've had a bugger of a day, and this was just the balm and unction I needed, ta very much..

Obi.
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Indie Skreet



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PostPosted: Wed Jun 14, 2017 7:34 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

thank you Obi and Tony. Wrote this for my daughter, who thinks she'll miss me when I'm gone! lol


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